9 - General Volstruis Mbuni

9th Apr 2020, 12:00 AM in Microraptor
9 - General Volstruis Mbuni
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Author Notes:

9th Apr 2020, 12:00 AM
Microraptor
After his faction lost the Ostrich War, General Volstruis Mbuni had to go into exile, and is currently residing in Monaco.

Being a quite embittered man nowadays, he hates everyone who fought for the opposite side with a passion.

Comments:

9th Apr 2020, 12:16 AM
Jay042
So, he lead a military junta in some African country, started some aggressive wars against his neighbors, supported by his Ostrich (possibly genetically engineered terror birds) Cavalry only to be repulsed by the joint actions his opponent nation and the pro-democracy movement within his country?
9th Apr 2020, 1:05 PM
Microraptor
Ah yes, I love it when 30 Days characters work out like that: I write a short paragraph merely hinting at stuff, and it sparks the readers' imagination! :-D

Actually, I haven't hammered out the details yet (except that my character # 11 will be implied to be one of his Western business partners) - but yes, something in this vein is indeed what I had in mind here!
9th Apr 2020, 12:18 AM
lirvilas
"Went into exile" always reads (for me at least) as "stole a ton of money from his country".
9th Apr 2020, 1:11 PM
Microraptor
That may well be - the stay at the Monaco Royale isn't cheap after all, the bill has to be paid somehow...

(Also, if he returns home, the currently ruling authorities may pester him with war crime-related accusations...)
9th Apr 2020, 8:37 AM
KidCthulhu
I like the subtle age lines in his face. I sometimes have trouble making characters look aged with my borderline minimalist style. Great job.
9th Apr 2020, 1:17 PM
Microraptor
Thank you!

I mainly tried to get across the bitterness mentioned in the author notes.
He probably still sees himself as the rightful ruler of his country...
9th Apr 2020, 1:43 PM
KidCthulhu
Bitter? Oh yes. He looks like he just took a bite out of a lemon!
9th Apr 2020, 2:16 PM
Microraptor
I bet he is training his bitterness face in the mirror each morning! :-D
9th Apr 2020, 4:55 PM
BustyLaroo
I love his grumpy, disgruntled face.
9th Apr 2020, 8:17 PM
Microraptor
It's really interesting to see that it's that part of this character which more than one commenter is focusing on! :-D
9th Apr 2020, 5:19 PM
Jay042
Only critique I have is that his uniform is a bit subdued for your typical dictator. He should have way more decorations.
9th Apr 2020, 8:26 PM
Microraptor
I simply took the same uniform colors as in my original "Ostrich Warrior" picture.

As for an in-universe justification, uh...
Consider that he is in exile, so he has to lay low a little bit. (But only a little.)
9th Apr 2020, 8:33 PM
lirvilas
@Jay: this is his "Class Charlies" (for everyday wear and trips to the brothel)

his formal uniform would blind you with its dignity

oh so much dignity
11th Apr 2020, 12:16 AM
Microraptor
Every evening he polishes the medals and combs the epaulettes...
11th Apr 2020, 1:19 AM
lirvilas
@ALL

Being a military man, the General (as he rightfully requires the hotel staff to refer to him as) puts on his dress uniform every morning to make sure he's within standards:

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(It's totally a standards thing and not some weird power tripping fetish.)

(all of that blood, sweat, and tears was for his men. seriously.)

(he's being completely modest and wearing only his top six awards)

(totally a standards thing. you non-military would not understand. totally about standards.)
11th Apr 2020, 1:27 AM
lirvilas
Did I mention that I hate the living s--- out of this guy?

Just wanted to make that super clear.

If Wildebees were to I don't know, accidentally stab him like two hundred times I think we could come up with some plausible plot point to support that.

...

Unlike oh say Augustus Alexander (who has inspired so much... pain) this dude is squarely in Timmy III territory. But unlike that time, it can't be me. It can't be me.

I know you aren't going to like this, but Microraptor, you have to kill this guy.
11th Apr 2020, 9:53 AM
Jay042
If nothing else, I've got a guy for the job.
11th Apr 2020, 5:06 PM
Microraptor
@Jay:
That would be an intriguing crossover...

Alternative candidates for this job (or maybe they... team up with Agent 05!?) could be either my # 4 of this year (who is originally not belonging to the "Monaco Royale" character set, but could very well fit in), or my upcoming # 14...
11th Apr 2020, 4:53 PM
Microraptor
@lirv:
Well... OK, sure!
I am pretty confident this can be weaved into the plot in some way.
After all, there is still plenty of time to contemplate the "how".

I mean, that was the point of the the exercise anyway - spitballing character (and hence plot detail) ideas for the Monaco part of the story, and see what sticks - and apparently, General Mbuni turns out to be very sticky...